FallenLeaves

Nice prospective, I like watching from a street corner. Overall this did have potential, but you made a big mistake throughout this whole piece. Thus making it troublesome and boring ...

It was a nice refreshing colorful piece. I was glad to see you didn't use the word "sound" at all until the very end. You used imagery pretty much throughout ...

I like the initial idea you had however, you got overwhelmed....Dying is very hard to translate in words. Some phases you included ( like sauce pointed out) did not fit ...