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  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: A necklace

    I love this. It's so complete and well rounded. I love that you portrayed a story as well as internal conflict. You have so few words but I can feel ...

    Aug 29, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Irene

    Hi. :) I love that you wrote this poem about Irene. It was a poem that needed to be written. Anyhow, I love the idea of it. Your mixed feelings ...

    Aug 29, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Four Poems

    Hi. I'm Jade. I like your poems. Poem #1 I really like your language here. Your way of describing the ordinary with unusual language is very pretty. Although I like ...

    Aug 9, 2011

  • Article / Essay » Review, General
    Re: What is the Best Book you have read...

    Hunger Games. (For shocking, heartbreaking, gutwrenching storytelling) The Host. (For beautiful characters, a fantastic theme, wonderful plotline, and a true sense of family) Uglies Series. (For the k

    Jul 30, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Fighting With Tenacity

    I don' know if I truly understand the poem/title relationship here. With the title 'Fighting With Tenacity' I expected there to be fighting... with tenacity. But the only thing this ...

    Jun 16, 2011


  • Hey there. This poem caught my eye because I also happen to love Sylvia Plath. I definitely think that this is a good poem. Lots of imagery, a good rhyme ...

    Jun 8, 2011

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
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    I'm always impressed at people who can rhyme well, and you certainly do. This poem's AAAB rhyme scheme is great, not forced or over-the-top. It has a nice lilting quality ...

    Jun 8, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Human

    I really liked this, I liked it's simplicity as well as its obscure structure. You definitely have a few great moments in here. My favorites were "of blood and bones ...

    Jun 8, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Saying Something About Love

    Hey, how are you? I'm Jade by the way. I also think that this poem is quite good. When I read your disclosure before the actual poem and then the ...

    Jan 30, 2011

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: 'Ere ain't that them Carnary Girls

    Hi there. I'm Jade, nice to meet you. First of all, I do really like your story. I think your writing style is fresh and unique, and while some might ...

    Jan 11, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: "Keys in Broken Locks"

    I liked the whole idea of this poem, the keys and the locked hearts, it's good imagery. But I'm not sure that I actually liked the poem itself. I felt ...

    Jan 8, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Monsters Are Real

    I did like this poem a lot. It took me reading it a few times to actually understand what it was about, but once I did I thought the idea ...

    Jan 8, 2011

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: The Sacrifice

    I thought this was a beautiful story. Rags to riches in a lilting tone of voice. I liked how you portrayed the first part of the story, very sinister, cynical, ...

    Sep 14, 2010

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Deleted

    Hello there. I'll start by saying that this was a nice story and I did enjoy reading it. However, I did find some stuff that put me off. For me, ...

    Sep 7, 2010

  • Article / Essay » Review, General
    Re: Worst Book You've Ever Read

    I'd have to say Julie of the Wolves, I forced myself to read it in 4th grade for AR points. My Side of the Mountain, as you can see I'm ...

    Sep 5, 2010


The words you speak become the house you live in.
— Hafiz