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Thank you for your suggestions. I'll do what I can before the deadline :-)

Would it work if he had some /clear/ thoughts about Incineriol being a nihilist? About him being evil?

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Does anyone know how to take away a literary comment that you don't need? I pressed the wrong button when I was trying to reply to a review.

When I wrote it there was a line between the the toaster scene and the forest scene but it hasn't shown up. I'll try to fix this stuff when I ...

Yeah, absolutely

Oh, I forgot about that... :)

I've seen some people split chapters up so I'll think about trying that. Thank you :-)

Yes, you may call me Biscuits. When I entered it at first I wanted Biscuits [space] BatchAvoy but the system was like eurgh spaces and flipped out so I had ...

That would be great! Yeah, I'll tag you next time. Thank you so much :) :) :D

Thanks for the all-caps thing. I've been trying to stop doing those but I must have missed some. Also, I think perhaps 'focusing' is the American spelling because my word ...

Oh, do you mean it's too long? I suppose I could like, split up the chapters into an easier length. Could you maybe tell me how long you think I ...

Thank you very much for the review - and also for reminding me that it's review day!

:)

Oh no I haven't. In fact, I assumed this was the first part. I'l have a look sometime :)

Hey, um, I know this is Strange's poem so this might be imposing but... Those are Rick Astley lyrics. It's a big 80s pop song that people cringe at the ...