ExOmelas

Thank you! I was trying to get chapter 5 finished up for today but I didn't quite make it. I don't know how many reminders it is going to take ...

np

aaand that was meant to be an arrow :P

Yeah :) Also, sorry about the glitch down there | | V

You're right, it shouldn't have to be explained. But as the world is just now, it does. And it's not about having a problem with heterosexuality; it's about showing that ...

This sensational feeling... It feels good. Kind of stating the obvious here :P They annoyed me deeply. Explain why. Asteroids are not normally described as annoying. It would therefore help ...

Thanks, Deanie! Your review as always is wonderful :P I'll keep going just now and edit later, since none of the problems are major, glaring gaps in the plot.

Thanks, Deanie! Your review as always is wonderful :P I'll keep going just now and edit later, since none of the problems are major, glaring gaps in the plot.

Thanks, Deanie! Your review as always is wonderful :P I'll keep going just now and edit later, since none of the problems are major, glaring gaps in the plot.

no problem :D

Only thing I'd say is that this sounds a lot more like a short story than a poem. I guess it could come under narrative poem maybe, instead of dramatic. ...

Ok

Alright, but keep in mind that you will not be able to tell your reader that.

I honestly felt like Caius was an afterthought for most of that. There was a lot more passion in Evie wanting to stay as a vampire than wanting to stay ...

ok