ExOmelas

I've been struggling with the first thing. It's difficult to say an animal's species without it being extremely obvious that you're shoe-horning it in. I'll try and think of something. ...

1. Oops this was one of the things I'd meant to change. I had this weird vision when I started of like publishing this as a periodical in a children's ...

Thanks for the review! :)

1. Haha, ironically I didn't originally then someone suggested I put one in XD About characters sounding different: will look into this. Lezeki: Yeah, there's a reason why they sent ...

Thanks for the review! It was just the sort of summing up/finding a message to take from the story type tone I was worried about Good to know it's not ...

Awesome :)

Thanks for the review :) this was written quite speedily last night so I'm not too surprised the execution needs work xD

Thanks for the review :) this was written very speedily last night, so I'm not surprised it's not at its best. I'll definitely work on it a bit more

Hm... I see what you mean about the justification. There is the fact that they grew up near to each other, but I'll come up with some element of back ...

Thanks for the review! I'm glad you like it :)

But... hm, it probably should make sense without me having to tell the reader that. I'll try and put something in the previous chapter about how nobody has any personal ...

Will change. It do promise it makes sense for backstory reasons that haven't been revealed yet, but I don't really know what to do with that :/

To the first question: I hope this is a result of you not having read all the previous chapters because in the chapter just before this they first find record ...

Hey, @Dracula is up :)

Ah right, you mean like you might have to say something like Will stammers over his words as he says: . I can see from BlueAfrica's review below that line ...