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It never actually occurred to me that he wouldn't want to bring up the deodorant thing, but now that you point it out that totally makes sense. I'll have Maderic ...

Haha, fair enough xD

Ohhh that makes sense about the chapter length. I have the same issue. Might want to put "Chapter 1 Part 1" in or something. Also, referring to biologically female people ...

Okay, I think I see where you're going with that. Wouldn't hurt to make that explicit in the line about Asha realising what should have been clear all along though

Oh dear, like, it's just a cold O.O I really need to make that less dramatic, you're not the first person to say that

I lied, I'm going to respond just now :P Hm... do you think I should mention which tournament every time? It's just kind of boring to say "I was in ...

Oh, ALSO. Can't believe I forgot this. I hope everything works out okay and if you ever need to vent my PM inbox is always open :)

Ooh that's really good - exactly what I was thinking of :D

Ahahaha that sounds unhelpful. You're welcome :D

You're welcome :)

You're welcome :)

Uh, that wasn't what I was expecting the takeaway of this to be at all. She just has a cold. She could easily have just hung out watching tv by ...

Ohhh I see... It would maybe make more sense for this to be a flashback, or to have put the prologue up once we have read at least some about ...

Haha! Thanks so much :D Go Team After Watch!

You're welcome :)