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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: A Pocketful of Posies - Chapter 2.1

    you're welcome :) and no rush, you're not the one a week behind :P

    Jul 25, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Science Fiction Re: The Secret of Tayburn Zoo: 1

    So, I was for a while considering calling this a prologue. From the next chapter the POV becomes limited to Patrick. Sometimes it's still a little omniscient sounding eg "If ...

    Jul 24, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Science Fiction Re: The Secret of Tayburn Zoo: 1

    Hey, Pomp, thank you so much for review! I think the beginning of this chapter is one of those cases where I'm just way more into it than someone reading ...

    Jul 23, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Before the Dragon - Chapter 2 (LMS IV)

    Ohhh okay. Would peace talks be too strong?

    Jul 22, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: (LMS IV) The Drowner: 2.2

    sigh, none of this was really meant to be a secret. it's one of those things where i've done worldbuilding and forget to explain it. basically the town is a ...

    Jul 20, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Science Fiction Re: The Secret of Tayburn Zoo: 1

    Ahhh thank you for the review! You might be right about leading with the animals. Was just my way of sort of like, setting a suspenseful mood because it was ...

    Jul 16, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Mystery / Suspense Re: Chapter 1

    you're welcome :D

    Jul 15, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: (LMS IV) The Drowner: 2.1

    Huh, interesting, Pan seemed to think this clarified the relationship more - that Daena is rather spoiled and Janet's had to be the one to step up, and enjoyed that ...

    Jul 15, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, Dramatic Re: Homecoming 1.3

    Maybe like a lot of hesitation or confused, pained looks? Something to show that he%u2019s stuck between different courses of action perhaps

    Jul 10, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Williwaw Chapter 1

    fair enough xD

    Jul 10, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: (LMS IV) The Drowner: 2.1

    Thanks Pan! I'm really glad you enjoyed it :D Dialogue stuff entirely makes sense, and the world-building stuff too... Actually I might as well admit that I was at 967 ...

    Jul 10, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: (LMS IV) The Drowner: 2.1

    Thanks so much Mess! I was really worried people were going to be bored by this chapter so I%u2019m glad you thought it was a decent amount of content :) ...

    Jul 10, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Before the Dragon - Chapter 1 (LMS IV)

    Ahhhh I see. I don%u2019t think it would be too jarring to just have ,her uncle, inserted somewhere

    Jul 5, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: The Moon Needs Her Night 23

    I%u2019m glad :)

    Jul 5, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: (LMS IV) The Drowner: 1

    Thanks for your review Stella! Physical description is something I could definitely do more of and I%u2019ll make sure to do some worldbuilding in the next chapter. Should be lots ...

    Jul 4, 2018


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