Evi

Hey sparkle! Welcome to YWS! Just a few notes before I get to the crit: You need to maintain a ratio of 2:1 with reviews and stuff posted. Like, if ...

Thanks a lot, MV. I'll try to cram that description in somewhere. Picture Prompt Nice involved a smiling girl lying on the grass with a fistful of limp flowers. The ...

Huh. My first review, the bolds got messed up. Oops. Newbie mistake, I suppose. But I love the changes you made, especially with the ending! It's great. Hope I wasn't ...

Thanks to everybody who had a look at this. I don't really need an in-depth critique, just maybe some feedback on rhythym and rhyming. If anyone has punctuation advice, I'd ...