Evi

Hey Warrior! Short review today. ;) One issue I find here is that your narrator's motions get very murky. She/he is flying, suspended, descending, glancing above...all while things float by. ...

Hey Hibiscus. I apologize for this going along for so long with only one review! One line-specific point: There’s beloved vestiges Vestiges = plural. Therefore, this needs to be " ...

Hey Tigs! :) Unfortunately I didn't enjoy this as much as everyone else. It was kind of emo and redundant. 1/3 of the lines were just repeating what the other ...

Hmm. Until I got to the twist, I was prepared to give you the generic spiel about why suicide stories and grieving friends are clichéd and unoriginal. And, while the ...

Okay, so, what now? ;) I think you mean this either as a prologue to a longer project (in which case you could move it to the Historical Fiction Novels ...

Hey PianoPlayer! I'm basically reviewing this because I've been playing the piano for nine years and automatically appreciate other pianists. :) Doesn't mean I'll go soft on you for the ...

Hey Vampyre! :) Very interesting story you've got here. I liked it. It's written well, and although I never really got a feel for characters or plot, it doesn't matter; ...

Hey Eli! Here as requested. According to it , he had suffered a gruesome death—when a navy soldier called Harris had found him, his chest and shoulders were soaked in ...

Hello again, Woozey! Here as I promised. Tina Pian smiled. She couldn’t help it. Everything was just so. Happy and perfect, the satisfaction temporarily easing her aching joints. Honestly, I'd ...

Hey Hobbit! Here as promised. Dawn rose above the city of Avirkian , and with it climbed pillars of smoke and steam floating from chimneys and pipes protruding from the ...

Hey Kasan, Evi here! :) :arrow: Show, don't tell! I'm not going to do a line-by-line because, well, there's too much to point out, unfortunately. But that's okay! That's what ...

Hey Hobbit! I just realized that I spelled the title wrong in my PM. Sorry about that! Inside the Captain’s quarters there was a calm. It was his sanctuary. This ...

Alleluia! Good work here. Your imagery basically fizzles out after the second stanza, but you have something to work with, at least! This liquid-like moon is artificial enough to splash ...

Hey Iceprincess! Firstly, the two syllable mistakes for the haiku format: The world spins around her and Girl turns her back Both are missing a syllable. Brushing off some dust ...

ARGH. I wrote an entire review for this and then accidentally clicked "paste", erasing the whole thing. I'll give you the same advice...just in a more condensed form. :arrow: If ...