Evi

Hey Shy, welcome to YWS! You should start reviewing around the site-- you'll get more reviews on your own work. ;) This is short and simple, and while that can ...

Hey Dream. :D it’s large hands stuck permanently at the 12. its is possessive; "it's" is a contraction for "it is". There are other grammatical/punctuation mis-haps I'd watch out for-- ...

Hey, Etc, welcome to YWS! So this was cute, but it confused me a bit. Writer's Block is generally when a writer can't think of anything, right? So if someone ...

Okay! Sorry this took so long, Lena-- for some reason my notifications didn't tell me you had responded to my wall post. >_> Darn technology. Anyway, autobiographies scare me, because ...

Hey! I enjoyed this. It's short and simple. I like your rhyme scheme, but you could tighten up the rhythm. Instead of just relying on rhyme at the end, count ...

Hey Cal! That first paragraph is quite large. =O Maybe you should start a new one after "White Hart" since the thought changes a little. It's just a little intimidating ...

Hey Cal. ;) Sorry for the delay! Alan Garrett had spent a week since Friday last at the home of one Sir Morton Ainsley, Major in the 52nd Regiment of ...

Hey Lena. ^_^ I’m only seventeen, you see. One thing I noticed early on is that your narrator's (Tony?) tone is very colloquial and informal, with a lot of "kind ...

Hey Daisuki. ^_^ Evi here. First thing I noticed: Esther Slyvester gave you a really good review on the first part. I agree with a point she made, which I'll ...

Hey Knightley. I've got to say, I'm a fan of your writing. Just dropping in for a quick crit. She would cuff me gently I thought the word choice of ...

Hey tele. ;) First of all, it's hard to review this because it's one giant paragraph. That's some serious formatting hindrance for your readers-- the block of text is intimidating, ...

Hey Jessa! A cute (that's probably the wrong word, but you get my drift) rhyming poem! :) You have good rhythm and your rhyme scheme is consistent. I don't have ...

Oh, you're good. :D I enjoyed this. I don't think I've reviewed your poetry much? I've kind of been avoiding it, but recently I've decided to venture back in a ...

Hey Ellie! Sorry for the delay. I have to warn you (and I think I've said this before) that I really don't like letter-style stories, so I'm already biased, but ...

Hey Kafka. :D Evi here. My poetry interpretation skills are a immensely rusty, but here goes! The first, very concrete thing I can say, is to avoid the "like" simile ...