Evi

Eek, Poem, I'm so sorry for the delay! Here, finally, as requested. First of all: Punctuation Within Dialogue Tutorial . Check this out. Your punctuation and capitalization are off during ...

Hey Logan! Sorry for the epic lateness of this review. So! Short segment, short review. I think the biggest thing you need to work on is your dialogue, and the ...

Hey! ^^ Sorry it took this long for you to get a review; I think it's because this is rather long to post in one segment. If it happens again, ...

Hey Raphael! So, wow. *whistles* I think I'll have to echo the previous reviewer, whose name I'm not going to try and spell. This was quite impressive! Biggest issue was ...

D: I just accidentally clicked the backspace button on this stupid review, so I lost it all, and since I don't have time to retype it all out, let me ...

Hey Young Gun! So, honestly, I'm not really sure what you're aiming for with this little series-type things. I read the first installment as well, and I've got to say ...

Hey Poem! ^^ Sorry for any wait, and thanks for using my thread. * First of all, I don't think it does you any good to call that first line ...

Okay! Don't have much time. Sorry for the wait, but you've already got a lot of reviews on this, so this doesn't need to be long. He had been verbally ...

Hey Logan! ^^ Thanks for using my thread. :arrow: The very first issue that jumped out to me is rhythm. A lot of people think that rhythm is only applied ...

xD Hey Hope! Evi here. This was extremely well-written. It was a short flash fiction kind of thing, so this isn't going to be a long review; I don't think ...

Hey! ^^ Evi here. So, this needs a lot of work. You have a nice little love story idea going on, with tons of possibilities, but before you let your ...

Hey! Evi here. ^^ So, I have mixed feelings on this. I actually think you wrote this very well-- your sentence structure, description, characterization, the lot. I enjoyed reading the ...

Hey! So, the previous reviewers made some good points about phrases that stick out or need to be reworded. I'll point out a couple more. It was a familiar one, ...

Hey Voice, Evi here. I think you use the English language very well here. Your sentences are interesting and stimulating, because you've got some imagery and suspense. So, kudos! I ...

Hey, Evi here! ^^ So, I'm gonna make this short. My paranoia starts creating images in my mind, I kick at the door. This is called a comma-splice. You have ...