Evi

Hello Emi! Evi here. This was the home of Death, the plane the dead cross on there way to whatever afterlife awaited them. Since the two other verbs in the ...

Hello Skittles! I feel like I've read this before, but I can't remember, so bear with me. ;) The tire wasn’t deflating slowly enough to where she kept going. You ...

Hello, youreit! Evi here. What a wonderful way to start a morning, I thought sarcastically as I picked myself up off the floor. This is a wonderful sentence to open ...

Here! Finally! *pants* The boy’s eyes lit up like little suns. “Do you think he will want?” Awkwardly phrased dialogue from Cole. Will want what? For Noah and Cole to ...

Hola! First of all, check out this tutorial on dialogue punctuation . You need to brush up on the grammar aspects of dialogue a bit, but that's easy to fix. ...

Hey! Sorry for the delay, again. Firstly! For future reference, if any of the other chapters are similar to this, I would appreciate a warning in your PM request to ...

Sorry for the delay, Shina, dear. I've been a bit overwhelmed as of late. I know she sees me, she always could. Semi-colon, not comma, because both phrases on each ...

Hey! I loved the powerful emotion behind this. It comes off as really strong, really passionate, and very raw. The raw emotion is good in some ways (it fuels the ...

Thanks for the request, Jigs! Sorry for any delay. In moments – a tortured eternity– it was over. We stood a foot apart, huffing, red in the face. I felt ...

This was great, Dems! ^^ And, while I'm here, let me thank you profusely for the critiques you've given me recently. ;) and shoetips are drowned by smell of anticipation ...

Hey Jasmine! The thing about repetitive poems like this is that it loses a lot of its surprise element, and, unfortunately, it loses some of the things that make a ...

Haha, no problem. YWS Fanfiction is writing that uses elements from this website-- members as characters, YWS inside jokes, literature and community forums for the setting, etc. ;)

PEZ, when I first met you My tastebuds were knocked back They didn't have a clue For they were under attack I find your rhyming slightly forced. Because, in actuality, ...

Hey herzing! I'm Evi. His snow touched skin, And November breathe Firstly, just as a general rule, "snow-touched" should probably be hyphenated. I'm not sure the exact rule for this, ...

Here as requested! =D Thanks for using my thread, and sorry for the delay. Arthur was just putting the finishing touch to the hover-car when it happened, the phone call ...