Evangelina

she whispers winter in the land across the sea she whispered winter deep, her roots planted, reaching, touching bark and skin all mixed within oil, splinters dripping leaves seductive images ...

Well thanks for taking a looksie. I was trying to make winter a female thing and my relationship with her somehow sexual...maybe thats just too...I dunno. Thanks anyhow.

I spoilered the ending, since the beginning is on the cover of my book.

The feelings were pretty mixed, I agree. I saw the movie, and it's a bit different from the book, so dont be disappointed. Its very good, of course.

Oh...does it have to be Annabell of all names? When I read this I was thinking, "Annabell Lee". [EAP]. It's a slight disappointment. To improve, I'd try to remove any ...

Sometimes the shortest and simplest peice is the best one.

the parts with the lengthy periods don't cut it for me. There's something way too elongated there. S1 is very good, especially for this type of opening. I'd build from ...

Why thank you very much!

Thanks, gin!

Thanks so much guys! I'll definetly work on it!

Thanks so much everyone! ------------------------------ Chapter I Lord of Lords It was a Sunday, a Holy day. The sky over the Vatican was a crystal-clear aqua that littered the room; ...

Frankly, I think there's too many pronouns.

Appy, I love it! Although the repeptition of words like "delve" got a little bit...well...repetitive. S1 rocked! Good job!

You know I loved it, having me was a bonus xD I'll go to read the next one now.

Aww Clau. I'm sorry.