Ethan

Wow... that was really sad and depressing. I thought you captured the mood perfectly, with the lack of formal rhyme and colloquial every-day language made it real. And very personal. ...

The opening stanza was a bit unclear in the imagery or meaning it presented, but I enjoyed the assonance and the rhyming within the lines itself. The word "hooray" seems ...

I really liked it and the fact that you handled a difficult theme well. It would have been more in-depth or better paced if there was a definite meter throughout ...

I liked. It was precise, simple and clear and the emphasis on similiar and related images (things not being put up, space being empty) was very effective. It seems the ...

My body jolts with the temperature of the water I shudder, then slide I open my eyes Green Blue Black Salt in my eyes, so I close them again I ...

I enjoyed the overall flow of the poem, and the imagery and themes were well integrated. In the color red there is passion, there is love. In red there is ...