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Hello there, Pff. Remember the contest name if you’re going to mention it! *** Quote: This knack, after too many examples to count, became a religion in Carters mind. Apostrophe ...

Hello, I don't know how to read her name. Neither the clan name, or - I don't know. I just don't. It looks pretty, yes, but there's a blank spot ...

Hey there, Vampires are uber cool, no matter what Meyers did to them, no matter than when these days you say "vampire", the automatic response is - "Edward?!" That's silly. ...

Hey, Execution scene - lovely. Although it would depend on the point of view... Oh, and did you ever happen to read Sapkowki's "Witcher" series? There also was an execution ...

Hey, Ever read anything of Lilith Saintcrow's? She has a whole series about a woman - Danny Valentine - working (at least at first) for the devil. That series if ...

Hey, One critique to blood you request, and so that you will get. quote: I'm a Star Wars-loving, Harry Potter-reading, robot-building, nerd. Get rid of last comma. quote: I know ...

Hello :) How are you on this lovely evening? It's more of a night for me here, but no need to get too technical, no? About timing at least. Before ...

Hello again, I'm back with the crit I promised :) Official greeting over, let's go. Hopefully I'll be a little more constructive this time. quote: My mind still played with ...

Hey, I've made up my mind and decided to say something, even if it might seem a bit random - lockers are indeed evil, or, rather, locker keys are. Well-drawn-out ...

Hello there, You'd be my very first critique-ish project in a very long time, and I'm on touchpad and just the slightest bit uncomfortable, so I'll start with the nitpicks, ...

Angel, Ello. Here’s my crit (: Quote: My fingernails made painful indentations in my skin, as I tried hard to keep from reaching across the table. No comma. Quote: His ...

KJ, Hello once again. Quote: He probably knew everything about me, as I did him. “as I did him”? Quote: Uncertain, I didn’t react, and after another second, ducked my ...

KJ, Ello! How’re you on this lovely, lovely day? Hopefully well (: Anyway, my line-by-line critique is, for all purposes and intents, inexistent. Nothing. I guess I could ramble on ...

Diamond, Hello! Hopefully you don’t mind me shortening your username, but I tried typing it out and eventually got irritated with the over usage of backspace. But your story, yes? ...

KingKamor,   Hello. How’re you? Quote: Though it’s beyond my understanding, Xandra manages to sleep in through my alarm at 8:30 in the morning. Nice intro. Quote: With it being winter, ...