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JennaLL, Welcome to YWS, aye? T’is a most wonderful sight, but very addicting. Anyway, to your story - my crits are as follows: first is the line-by-line one (read: nitpicks), ...

rubberduck, Hello there. Esme here, and it’s me who’ll have the pleasure of critting your piece. Onward, then. Quote: He needed to hear the sound of his own voice for ...

Kylan, First of all, I’d like to say that I couldn’t wait for the next installment - and here it is, making me all giddy. So, I’ll discard any attempts ...

Loose, I think I’ll just echo your avatar - brilliant. So much for a constructive critique, yes? But there really wasn’t anything I could be nitpicky about, or in general ...

Stockmar, That is one long paragraph that you go there, seriously. I stared and stared at it before even reading your story, and… that is not a good sign. However, ...

LovableLittleSock, First of all, hello. That short inrto over, let’s move on to the mechanics of the crit: I’ll start out with a usual line-by-line one, and then’ll come any ...

enzoguy15, I was about to say - and squirm a bit while doing so - that my stuff is longer, and that there’s no need to worry about it, I ...

Ballroomdancer95, Welcome to YWS (it’s an awesome site!), but… I know that everyone wants to have their work critiqued - I do, too - but here at YWS we have ...

Angel of Death, I’ll start out by saying that the text would be easier to read if it were spaced. Of course, that never stopped anyone if the story was ...

Scasha, Well, I only read the rewrite of chapter one, so everything should be clear to me, yes? ^^ On with the critique, same rules as always. Quote: Suddenly, the ...

scasha, I didn’t read the original chapter, but I’ll critique this. As always, a line-by-line one will be followed by any impressions and comments that I might have. Edit: Damn, ...

Medusa, Hello. Was skimming through the Fiction forums, stumbled upon your story, and thought I’d critique. Anyway, first’ll come the line-by-line one, and then impressions, etc. Quote: On rotten

Muteman, Spacing is cool, yes. And so long as the text is good, who’d care for the length? Anyway, as always with my crits, first will come the irritating (I ...

kittykat, As usual with my critiques, I’ll give you a line-by-line one first, and then I’ll move to impressions. Quote: Now if your wondering where here is, you would have ...

ashley, I must say that I personally am not happy at all by the length. Grr. But, onto my critique… Quote: “Oh, what a warm welcome for an old man.” ...