This second chapter of your story was very good, although it was rather short. I found only one mistake and it is right here:
Merlyn can read; the only other thing he’s good for. I had never learned. Reading and writing were lost arts in Brita(add an n).
I would like to know a little bit more about the order and Melody. I don't know if you planning to include that in a following chapter, which I'm sure you are.
Overall, this chapter was better than the first and I can't wait to read the next.
Points: 890
Reviews: 4
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