Eric511

Wow. The story is very detailed. You really know how to paint a picture in your head. Great detail, but maybe a tad too much in some areas. But you ...

Interesting, makes you want to know what happens after. Some of the details like the cowboy thing and the texan accent, seemed in the wrong time and age. Perhaps you ...

That was pretty interesting. I do agree with Joec that you should spell check it. The other thing that I would say needs help is detail. You should explain the ...