EnderFlash

I am here. And I'm so cold that it's hard to type with these numb fingers ;____; Very Helpful Advice, Hmm Yes. Aw, these two are quite cute. Are you ...

Critiques and Extra Stuff I invited a friend to help out today! I took some of his suggestions to formulate this. The paragraphs are cut strangely. For example: Rick sighs. ...

... Darn... I'm late... I need to start putting more focus into this website and not just dropping by to post a not-exactly-half-but-definitely-not-full-effort'ed chapter into the weekly submissions t

She practically has fangs, but Willow knows already that there aren’t vampires in Franklin City. If only you knew, Willow, if only you knew. Info dump, eh? Well, you presented ...

EHUEHUEHEUHUE She lifted her head and a golden diadem appeared, as well as long, pure white hair cascading down her back. Did her hair appear after everything else? Because putting ...

'ello! I was beaten by ParanormalMyth! Nooooooo- Comments and Impression! 1. I'm expecting Mrs. Williams to be a total sweetheart inside. It's just that character archetype. Then again, you said ...

orz I'm last again. I need to bump Buggie's first note so badly. I was actually getting kinda irritated with Darren right there, since he jumped way to quickly to ...

*spits blood* I'M THE LAST ONE? x_x The three poisons are already set up on each of your benches, so instead of waiting for the rest of the class to ...

I'm loving Mr. Pyus so. damn. much. If you kill him, I swear I'll kill you. Mr. Pyus says, ignorant of the fact that he has just been ignored I ...

I've been playing League too much lately. As soon as Exceed released that slowing ball, terrible memories of being slowed/stunned with area effect moves, then killed, came back to me ...

Before reading this chapter, I decided to read Buggie's review for whatever reason. I'm not sure whether to love or hate spoilers. I'm just going to bump Buggie's thing about ...

You have extended periods of dialogue and nothing else. I know it's just test correcting, but each student has their moment of "Crap I got it wrong!" or "I really ...

My gosh you're fast (compared to us, anyways). I wonder what/who killed him, because wow, what a death. Did it get Mellie, too? -- Something feels off about Mellie's panicked ...

....Oh... IT RHYMES. OHHHHHOHOHOHOH I still can't get over J's paragraphs. I know she's a dancer and the point is to show her dancing-like battle movements, but there's no need ...

A small nitpick: When Mellie is searching up Talisman Consulting, the way you just say 'her forehead still digging into the window' gives me the impression that her face is ...