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Re: Arian (a sort've long short story)
Irishhh! :D It's been a while, a long while, but here are my thoughts on the next section. :smt023 Nitpicks! We walked into the King’s chamber silently, looking down at ...
Dec 25, 2009 -
Re: The Devil Has Dimples (Prologue + Chapter 1)
Cynara! I'm here to review your long-anticipated story here. :wink: :smt023 Prologue: Nitpicks: Stop laughing, it was nor funny. "Not"? It was just a little snake, no big of a ...
Nov 4, 2009 -
Re: Shadows of Eternity - Chap. 3
Sorry, it's been a while. ^^' I do intend to review all of this story, by the way. Especially after this chapter. :smt003 :smt023 Nitpicks: Sorry to repeat wheat the ...
Oct 31, 2009 -
Re: Behind Closed Bloodlines (A Short Story)
Okay, just a very quick note to say how you've put the dialogue in bold. Don't. (: How many stories have you seen where the dialogue is in bold? Erm... ...
Oct 19, 2009 -
Re: Hillsong - 1
Hey there, michaelahart! Welcome to YWS, hope you really enjoy it here. It's ever so wonderful. :wink: If it's any consolation, I'm hardly 14? Nope. No consolation. I've seen people ...
Oct 19, 2009 -
Re: Into the Depths - Chapter III
Hellooo! I see no more chapters are up. :( Damn, I'll review anyways. :smt003 :smt023 English/American words (or spelling mistakes O.o): it had a delectable odor . Odour. I'll help ...
Oct 15, 2009 -
Re: The Gemma Doyle Trilogy
Only just found this thread... :D Libba Bray is amazing in so many ways. I can't be bothered at the moment to list them all. ^^ But you guys already ...
Oct 12, 2009 -
Re: The Movie for Twilight (Part Two)
B: (open-mouthed) He stole your gun, aren't you going to do something? C: (laughing) Do something? Like what? (mock-points his gun at EDWARD, who mock-panics) Freeze! You stole my gun! ...
Oct 4, 2009 -
Re: How To Save Your Life (H2SYL) Prologue Re-written
Oh, how creepy! Your thoughts return to the warmth of the blanket , remembering that you have already turned off your electric blanket . This just stood out to me. ...
Oct 4, 2009 -
Re: Half Of You To Hold
Hello cogito! I'm here to review your piece, obviously. ^^ :smt023 Nitpicks: It was 11: 05 when he called me that day. Great start here. The only thing I would ...
Oct 2, 2009 -
Re: Mrs Jones - Chapter 9
Hello there Heffa! This was once again very good. I just notice a couple of typos, that's all. “Just a bad nightmare.” You forgot the "a". I can tell something ...
Oct 1, 2009 -
Re: The Break Up: The Percfect Guy
Cynara! You're back in the game! Excellent! I do love your work. :smt003 Thanks so much for the PM or I would have missed this! Well, on with the review! ...
Oct 1, 2009 -
Re: Shadows of Eternity - Chap. 2
Wow. This is so much better than the first chapter. ...Not that the first chapter was bad or anything... I think it may be because you don't have the info ...
Sep 30, 2009 -
Re: Round Like The Moon (6)
WHO IS THE NERDY GUY?? :smt003 Yeah ... I just thought I'd glance over this again. But the mystery is killing me! ...Are you continuing with this...? Please do! It's ...
Sep 30, 2009 -
Re: Arian (a sort've long short story)
Irish! Promised I'd get around to it, didn't I? :wink: Yeah, it looks a little long, but hopefully it'll be so good that actually it's too short. :P So... :smt023 ...
Sep 26, 2009