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For a very short piece this was an enjoyable read. The first paragraph I especially liked as it set the voice and mood of the piece and felt very pleasant ...

I love this work overall, especially the descriptiveness and the emotion and the story could almost be taken right out of my life. Pretty cool. The second and third sentences ...

Okay this is a really cool story with a great concept. You did an excellent job in your descriptiveness of the world. I felt like I was right there with ...

"I had failed every test. I was unable to walk to school without falling on my face. Everything I looked at seemed to merge together, and most of the time ...

Great story in my opinion. I loved these two sentences: "This woman here, life dropped her in a puddle and peed on her just for good measure. That doesn’t say ...

I felt the story was interesting and it did indeed hold my attention. There is a lot of little stuff that could use cleaning up, just rereading/rewording. For example I ...

Thats great, really. Taking such a simple(or not really I guess) day to day struggle and turning it in to a entertaining story. Reminds me of when I was little/in ...

Interesting story to say the least. The beginning couple paragraphs seemed a little cluttered. A lot of words saying not very much, it got the point across though so if ...

Please suffer through my excuse for a review, I was certainly not born for these things but here goes. Overall I thought the narrative moved forward well, the only hiccup ...

Envy is what I feel when I see them together holding hands, and whispering how much they love one another; for not to long ago I was that girl. Getting ...

Great piece in my most humble opinion. I disagree with half what Always said but to each their own I guess. I really liked the whole emptying purse thing, I ...

Interesting, definitely created a mood and has a feel. Great descriptiveness. The flow(as short as it may be) seems to be very much smooth. Punctuation grammar and the sort isn't ...

As I have told all one or two other people I have reviewed I will not give that in depth of a review. It's just not in me and I ...

No offense to the person above me but that sounded more like a spellcheck(not literally, you get my point) to me, if thats what you wanted great. On the the ...