Emerson

I did like this--it had more emotion than most poems I see. But I also had some issues with it. "hurt", "kill", "ache" they're all very general, vague words--and word ...

I really, really loved the imagery and the rhyme scheme in this. It was beautiful, imo. I could see the rose on the water, and everything =] But I still ...

It's good. But I want more imagery. >_> Maybe I just can't see/feel the imagery you're already giving us. Rain is used a lot in fiction (to the point of ...

Everyone else has said lots of good things. ^_~ One thing I liked about this is you personified your misery, but I think I would have liked it if you ...

just let me live with you for a few months, staring at you, chanting "Write write write write write" and threatening to take away your tanz-metal CDs and you'll get ...

When they’d left Earth 's orbit, the time it took to get everything back to normal after a hyperspace jump had been a day. “Yes, Captain Ramsey,” t he AI ...

Oy, I feel bad for this, but I have to say I can't exactly think of anything to say. I'm going to have to come back and reread this some ...

hmmm Add punctuation. they sing of days where hope still had wings And sometimes the sky keeps secrets- it never speaks of years of forgotten memories. It seemed like you ...

I think I liked this, simply because I'm a complete gossip whore ^_^ And it was simple, and straight to the point. I usually hate poems like that! But please ...

I love alliterations but I think you used way too many here. It just suffocated me. And why are certain words punctuated? You would assume they have some great meaning ...

Preaching in poetry has always rubbed me the wrong way. Also, all you are doing is telling. Why not show us something? This message is something told over and over ...

Some kind of animal? a nocturnal one. I can't really pick it out. If I were to critique this I'd say fix the line breaks. Your lines are way too ...

hmmmm....I shall explain my understanding of the story in a minute. First! Random me shouting grammar at you despite the fact that we both know we disagree with each other ...

I am here! When Sukie was a kid, she liked to hang out in the graveyard... I don't like ellipses. =/ She had been standing at the sink[s], actually,[/s] washing ...

This is awesome ^_^ as eighteen people got seventeen lifejackets I hate when people use the word "got" for "have" The waves pull ed higher, barely shot back by the ...