Embee

Hey, it has been a while! Alright, so I couldn't find any glaring errors with this chapter, but the only thing that I would suggest fixing is breaking up the ...

Hello, haven't been on here in a while, but I'd be glad to give you a review! But before I start your story, I'll give you my opinion on the ...

Hello! Back again; sorry if I'm a little late. I like the revisions you made, but maybe you could break the history into smaller sections? Like have her read a ...

Dang it! I got here too late again! Hmmm, like everyone else, I like how you ended the chapter with a cliff hanger. I like how you give us insight ...

Woah, this is really long. First, you should break down your posts into smaller parts. That way, more people will want to read and review. Also, you might want to ...

Hey, I'm not sure how to go about critiquing scripts, but I'll try my best. I honestly couldn't find anything horribly wrong with this. It sounds like the type of ...

Hey Skins, I thought you did a pretty good job on this. I like how he's trying to be all positive in the beginning but in the end, he eventually ...

Hello! I think that this has a lot of potential to be a haunting and deep piece, but right now, you need to work on your character development and descriptions. ...

Hey I thought this was a very powerful piece. I love your descriptions and the quote is inspiring as well. You have a very good vocabulary ( primordial, clandestine ), ...

Hello! You have a good story going here, but I really think that you're doing too much telling and not enough showing. Add in some dialogue, action, emotion, descriptions, suspense, ...

Hey! I appreciate your comments on my photography, so I'm here to return the favor. I think you have a good idea here, but you can do so much better ...

Hello! I thought this was a nice little piece but I think you could expand a lot more on it. Long-lost relatives have crawled out of the woodwork to bombard ...

Helloooo! Thanks for your review on my pictures, by the way. One thing I've noticed about this novel is that you switch points of view every chapter and put the ...

Hello, these were well written, but I think you could have expanded more on some parts, like the whole King and Queen thing. Are they part of a pack? No, ...

Hey, I thought your descriptions were very vivid, but the plot itself fell kind of flat. There isn't anything extremely eye catching about it. It's just another "person can't sleep" ...