Elong451

"You'de think that if we were really turning into some stupid immortal that we ouldn't get hurt." ^ you'd ^ take out into some stupid ^ wouldn't cant wait for ...

This poem is the saddest thing i have read all day. I know how it feels to not believe some thing so good would happen to you. It's especially hard ...

I like this. I like how this is set. Your title refers to a prince, is he bored? Tired? ignorant of the evil? If he is any of these things ...

This is really amazing and expessive. You've got some great talent!!! welcome to YWS!!!!! glad to see yet another expressive poet. I agree with your idea to back up and ...

Watching as if through a glass. The world is moving slowly around me, doctors, friends, and family. They whisper to me but my ears hear only a soft buzzing. If ...

I feel like hitting you with one of my few and fainting attention rays which radiate from my small mind. If you really feel this way, and i do too ...

I know exactly how you feel in this poem. I also have one whom likes my stories, but never shall like me. I absoluetly ave to agree with what lilymoore ...

Very well retold. In the part where zeus rains down on her is the best part. How long does/can your story be? i wonder if you could discribe the comings ...

I love your story, and I would love to read more. I agree though with what ranger hawk has said about the italics. When you italisize thoughts; the reader at ...

Tell the reader you mean children when you say "Four years since they got married, and I've jumped from one out of three, to one out of seven. That's a ...

I love your story. May i ask if English is your first language? If it's not this is an amazing story. You have done an exelent job. Work on ways ...

Hello darling, I am a noob to this site, here is my review of your story. Are you using an omniscient view when you write this? It's very interesting. I ...