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Do I, or do I not? A classic question, really. Does she or does she not? Something that's haunted me for years. Will I, or will I not? Quit talking ...

At the beginning of the novel Chayton, a Native American veterinarian, finds his mate, Keaton, a blonde haired Caucasian teacher. There should be a comma after "Chayton." Otherwise, it sounds ...

On our land we had a huge barn. You used "land" in the last sentence. Use another word. The barn contained nothing except my dad’s power tools and the dog ...

Long minutes passed, with no sound from above or any conversation between the two of them. Who are "them?" Aela kept glancing at the boy, taking note of his small ...

It was the 21st of July, 1994. Did you mess up the date? It was his favourite. "Favourite" is spelled "favorite." but it was his favourite none the less. Once ...

The essay doesn't have a lot of mistakes. :smt038 So cute and cuddly that many a rational person has made the impulsive decision to bring one home, a few hundred ...

Stars. I like stars. Love, adore, want to eat etc. "Love to eat" doesn't fit with the rest of the sentence. I mean the ones shining bright at night, glancing ...

I was extremely nervous but I kept telling myself that it would be easy, and all I needed to do was ask and get it over with, and the worst ...

People always told me that you only get one life, so don't screw it up, however, I had screwed mine up beyond repair. This could be separated into two sentences. ...

Published author and high school freshman Asher Edelson sits at his laptop, and gets ready to start his family history book. There should be commas before Asher and after Edelson. ...

I'll try not to repeat what the others have said. In Greek History, one poet made such an impact as to change the very nature of Greek religion. Try rearranging ...

This whole Lent season… what’s it to me? I’ve “lent” so much, I thought I was dead. I lost my voice, my last resort. I’m mute. My thoughts come forward ...

his hot blood running down my throat "Hot" doesn't need to be in the sentence. I knew he knew I was there. The first "I knew" doesn't need to be ...

Kyrstin stood against the firm brick wall. "Firm" doesn't need to be in the sentence. The sun rained down on her as she waited for the first bell to ring. ...

There aren't many things that need to be corrected in your story. In the event of a continuum quake the first and most important rule is to panic without abandon. ...