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lol, I guess I win then, huh? I still need to find a better way to do this, but one hasnt presented itself yet.

thats because it is--but then again, so's Hunter's dream. So there.

WRITE you hopeless fool!!!!! BOUNDLESS dude, come on! You're as bad as me--get some stuff polished up and then back to writing!!!!!

I didn't thought it was childish. I mean maybe love is just different for everyone. Maybe love is falling in love, heart being broken, falling in love again, being happy ...

This is a high school three day fling at best. Frankly, I feel like it demeans true love, makes 'I' seem like a callous fool, and like you can just ...

All right, so hyphens're not workin--got it. Ellipses gone....got it. Shakespeare....gone. Anything else friends? So this is Life Waking up in the morning Plodding along meaninglessly Infatuated with

Actually I like the numbers. Generic, yet interesting. If you just change the dialogue and the WAY they do things, like stompin around for Two instead of walking around....you know?

Thank you Sophie--its good to hear stuff like that.

Corduroy Summers IMO...and great job Chev.

I've given my own opinion and corrections on this to you already...but I'm sure you'd like more comments......

Thanks Reich--means a lot.

Thanks Surreal and--*looks back at previous post* HEY. I knew something weas funny!! jk lol

In my opinion, it seems like the story is movig a bit too fast, with little explanation--as long as all this is explained to me later, I will be content. ...

Tee-hee, Brad finally got me!! YAY! I feel like a real poet now! I'm not seriously considering poetry as a career, becuase, well, I suck at it--this is just a ...

This is me--the entire poem is actual thoughts, true feelings, and real experiences. Which is why it needs to die and go to Hell.