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Very teen angst. I like it. I like how the cycle begins anew, only this time the narrator is the heartshredder with skeletal hands....I liked that part a lot, by ...

Kat and I are masters of the parody. Believe me, this is the most serious Parody you will ever see lol

"Whathellwasthafo?" Max mumbled. The half-sleep mumble is a language few people understand...and even fewer in number are those who speak it while awake; but after being around Max (a constant ...

Man, I really wanna get farther into the story!!!!!! Would any of you mind if I posted the beginning of the second book? Gah, never mind, that would be silly.

Like I said, can so totally relate to that right now. I may pin it on my wall..... Along with all your other work..... And that tissue you dropped at ...

I like it..... might wanna clarify for the reader what a "black flawless zip-up with a vamp collar" is

well, the Nightwraiths are human....are they not?

I like how it seems to be directed right at the "Princess," and uses that title sarcastically, almost like a derogetory term... and the whole hybrid of the medieval terminology ...

SK, I'm pretty sure the proper term for them IS canine teeth...

Looks good so far-- Nothing to add that Aebitrator and Akisha haven't already said...

okay...what I read I liked, I'll say that first. I'd suggest that you space out your paragraphs with each new speaker, because right now it's just one massive hunk of ...

Vary nice, Carmina--beautifully done. I'll chat up a storm next time I see ya about it! ;)

I do. Quote em out to me.

That could work--I like the lower case i's and the capitalized "Hers"...but not so much the all caps "HERS." The repetetiveness is good, don't change it at all!

From what I can tell, skeptik, "She," "The Girl," and "I" are all the same person, and "Her" is a separate person. I like the poem, but anyone that knows ...