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Hey Mr. Mustard. Normally I'd precede this review with a disclaimer, but it's not necessary this time. This went completely over my head. I'm not an expert on poetry, so ...

Hello, Bored. Disclaimer: Everything in this review is opinion. While I won't always say "In my opinion,." it should always be implied unless explicitly stated otherwise. I don't presume to ...

Hello, Meg. As requested. Disclaimer: Everything in this review is opinion. While I won't always say "In my opinion,." it should always be implied unless explicitely stated otherwise. I don't ...

Hello, 322. As requested. Disclaimer: Everything in this review is opinion. While I won't always say "In my opinion,." it should always be implied unless explicitely stated otherwise. I don't ...

Hello, Summer. Or when your all alone in a world that holds billions? When your all curled up in your on misery? Twice a painful mistake. You're = you are. ...

Hi pen. Almost the first half of the story is an info-dump, unfortunately. You toss lots of little bits of information that are relevant, but jumbled together in an only ...

This was Cody’s first migration, he wasn’t even yet a year old and he was nervous, as usual, about this new thing. Watch for run-on sentences. I only noticed this ...

Prologue Expand this, please. In my opinion it's too short to really be an effective introduction to the rest of your story. How would this trade route work?” I listened ...

It appeared that they were going to make the invaders earn every inch. Makes it sound like they're happy to give it to them, so long as they deserve it. ...

Good read! I'm not sure if there's more to it or not, but even if there isn't, it's a good standalone piece. I only have a couple nitpicks, because the ...

Fair enough! I see where you're coming from. My main reason for pointing that out is because the dialogue is very formal, and formality is attributed to humans, it seemed ...

Not hard hitting enough. Too whimsical for a piece dealing with the loss of someone's future. Why a centaur? How is it he is able to bargain for something that ...

I'm on my Mobile right now, so I can't be as detailed as your poem deserves, but I'll do my best to express my comments. Some of your rhythm stammers ...

A very typical Grecian view of the Underworld. Punished by being forced to go through the same pain over and over until the end of time. Since it's so common, ...

On pace; you take this far too quickly! You move from one paragraph of running from a bully straight into a fantasy-type setting; give us a little more time to ...