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Hello, socks. Gunslinger . . . Guns linger . . . Guns are ghosts, lingering with me... Not a fan of the repetition of "linger." It's too fancy a word ...

I always seemed to have a tune stuck in my head these days. Dun like this. We don't even know anything about the character yet and you're already spoon-feeding us ...

I talked to you about my thoughts on this piece in chat, so I will simply rehash what I said so you have it for future reference. --Great patience in ...

Hey cC; Disclaimer: Everything in this review is opinion. While I won't always say "In my opinion,." it should always be implied unless explicitly stated otherwise. I don't presume to ...

Hi Lauren; Disclaimer: Everything in this review is opinion. While I won't always say "In my opinion,." it should always be implied unless explicitly stated otherwise. I don't presume to ...

Falling leaves were scattered all over the muddy wet floor. Great starting line. I find it to be a big passive, though, and therefore uninteresting. I'd make it more aggressive, ...

This is little more than a fragment. There's little-to-no plot and very little character development. I like the direction it's headed, or rather, where it came from, but as of ...

You are staring at a blank page of paper- I think this would read better as "you're staring at a blank sheet of paper." Page implies part of the book, ...

Hello, rlw. Interesting piece. I found myself interested by largely unmoved by the character, as we don't know him for very long before his life ends. We find out some ...

Hello, Psud. As requested. Disclaimer: Everything in this review is opinion. While I won't always say "In my opinion,." it should always be implied unless explicitly stated otherwise. I don't ...

First and foremost...ouch. Like really, really ouch. With each new speaker should come a new paragraph, like so: “Bye friends so, today’s my last day I have to leave the ...

Hello. As requested. Disclaimer: Everything in this review is opinion. While I won't always say "In my opinion,." it should always be implied unless explicitly stated otherwise. I don't presume ...

Hello again, subtle. Disclaimer: Everything in this review is opinion. While I won't always say "In my opinion,." it should always be implied unless explicitly stated otherwise. I don't presume ...

Hello, subtle. Disclaimer: Everything in this review is opinion. While I won't always say "In my opinion,." it should always be implied unless explicitly stated otherwise. I don't presume to ...

Hello, Unfinite. Interesting. Not great, but interesting. It has potential, but right now it's not meeting it. ...black sheen of the metal muted under the viscous red blood which now ...