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It was a pretty interesting read. I like the idea behind it a lot. I think you could do a better job of wrapping it up than stating "the moral ...

Ha ha! I love it! Morons saving the day by accident always make me laugh. Anyways... I have just one nitpick: “What are you doing?” I asked. Mind you, I ...

this sounds like a very interesting beginning. I'm interested in where you're going with it. I just have a few comments: She ran along the windswept beach of silky sand ...

Absolutely honestly, I liked this. I really only had three things that I would change. 1) You seem to use a lot of the same sentence structure. It's alot of ...

Just to start off, I'll second what TBR and Dammerung said: this needs to be formated. At the very least it needs to be seperated off into paragraphs and most ...

I have to admit, that this is not really my style. However, I do have to say that it was written well and the word choice was good. I really ...

The formatting is a little off. And I'd like to point out this new feature on the YWS called a "Spellchecker". I think it might become your best friend if ...

Smaur... *shakes head sadly* I'm afraid that I have to break some bad news to you. This story... it's sort of, kind of, possibly might be, just a little teeny ...

You stole my phrase!!! *jumps up and down* my phrase! But I forgive you... And the singing quartet is awesome... Hmm... I'm the fourth person to say that... think there's ...

Amber egg? :shock: What is it?! lol. Anways, as a beginning, this was pretty good. The only problem I had with it was that you don't have alot of sentence ...

I think the tears thing... Well, usually whenever skin is wet, even if it's hot outside, the moisture always seems to be cooler than the air. So I guess I ...

One whole month away from YWS! WHEW? Well I'm back now and I'm going to celebrate by sending in my latest. :elephant: Yay! It's good to have you back. This ...

*rolls eyes* I love how you all talk about me like this... I'm gonna be paranoid now and go search the site for all the places my name shows up, ...

First couple paragraphs - Awesome. I love the descriptions and the analogy of the barbie in her "Hang Me Barbie" box. It really caught me. The rest of it... it's ...

Whoa... You've picked a tough subject here. Good luck. I read through it and there were only three things that really stood out to me. 1) Spelling. There's a spell ...