Dubaian

Remember that sometimes when you use a spellcheck that you may have typed a word correctly, but not the correct word for the sentence. Proof-reading helps to ensure you have ...

Hi, I agree with Lauren on this one. Very interesting characters and setting. The dialogue initially had me confused on who was who between the two men, but I got ...

Reread the rules stickies before you post. As of December, 5 reviews of other peoples work before you even begin posting your own. Interesting, however, I found there were numerous ...

All of my limbs were numb, leaving me nothing. Literally, nothing inside of me This could and probably should be wrapped up into one sentence. All I know is that ...

I believe it was implied with: you’re the only child That they are just pretend sisters. the sword in his chest bothered me. The word 'bothered' does not seem to ...

goes straight through I think 'pierced' could have replaced those three words there, a better descriptive word for the situation in my opinion. though the would fiercely The should be ...

And only a few hundred are still alive... Thus the human race will be extinct very soon. I believe my understanding of a sustainable population for an entire race has ...

I read the first chapter but did not continue to the second. This needs a lot of work (Emphasising a lot). Upon reading the first chapter, there were a couple ...

Firstly I suggest you read the rules on posting. Max of around seventeen hundred (1700) words per post and you will need a minimum of three reviews, as of November ...

Couple of errors and strangely worded sentences. like migrating bird Perhaps 'Birds' is the word you were looking for. Phenomena of this gargantuan proportions does Replace 'this' with 'such' and ...

A good post, quite a bit to read but I am glad I had the time :P. I could not spot any spelling or grammatical errors, but as I review ...

your life flashes before your eyes. That’s a lie. My memories consumed me. Contradiction, needs revision, either by changing her view on what happens when you die or by removing ...

My first review “So, can you at least tell me who is going to win the flag this year?” I think this needs to be explored, even just a quick ...