Dreamworx95

But, finding myself clearly portrayed in his mirror-like eyes as an elephant, I don't get it. Does this mean he's fat? Or am I being stupid and missing something totally ...

really weird things that end with you waking up on the floor, are probably dreams. No need for the comma after floor. The smeared mirror that hung next to my ...

Freeeaaaky! I'd be way too scared to write something like this! I have to hand it to you for your courage! Why haven't you written more? Get on with it ...

Yes, I do like that one better. You should use it.

and my arm round his head, My arm around his head. I heard Jim deep voice scream Did you mean: I heard Jim scream in his deep voice? Makes more ...

Sorry, made no sense to me. It was too confusing to be funny. You need to improve on grammar and spelling.

Thanks for all the reviews, guys! Mucho appreciato!

Ooh I wonder what happens next? Quite frankly, I'm happy someone has finally created a heroic tale with a girl.

I'm writing the review right now. Hang on, this could take a while......

At the moment the story is pretty simple. And as for the name, I had nothing to do with it. I really don't like the name Clover either. This is ...