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Hi Megrim, thank you for taking the time to review this. I agree that there are a lot of instances where the emotions were being told rather than shown. To ...

You're not alone. It's like this never-ending dark hole that you can get lost in if you're alone and you think about it too much. I've found that conversing and ...

Te word limit explains why it seemed a little rushed. It has the potential to be a novella if you explore the characters more. If you expand this, I'd be ...

When I can't find a matching pair of socks, I wear different socks on each foot. I should get myself a pair of footy pajamas.

MLanders, these are such lovely comments to read after posting this! I know that a story of this length can be daunting to read, so I'm so happy you enjoyed ...

Duplicate post!

Hi RedRoze, you don't have to eliminate ALL ellipses if you feel they are really necessary. I understand that you're trying to portray Aurora's thinking/speaking tendencies, but I just think ...

Hi Letiki, This is a wonderful poem. The story is perfectly executed. I love the structure and the uneven rhyme scheme. The poem sounds so musical when I read it ...

Ah. Yeah, sometimes we readers need to suspend our questioning until knowing the rest of the story. I personally like the suspense you add to this. Are you planning on ...

And thank you for taking the time to read this. I appreciate your comments. And I'll take your advice about including the reference to Plath in the body of the ...

Hi racket, sorry you couldn't understand this poem and you found it hard to read. I did not write it with the intention of it being misunderstood, although a lot ...

I should also mention that this poem has references to Sylvia Plath's "The Bell Jar." The poem itself was inspired by her "Lady Lazarus."

Hi Idraax, thanks for the review. I'm sure you've noticed there are a lot of contrasting images in the poem, which is why I had the "understatements plume" line. It's ...

klotrox16, Thanks for the review! This poem is structured in the form of a villanelle, where the first and last lines of the first stanza repeat themselves in the last ...

Hey davantageous, I love how you put kooky rhyming words togher like "fued" and "skewed" My favorite stanzas are the first and the last. And the second stanza sounds much ...