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Ah, thank you so much Princess! I know these chapters are long so I appreciate you reading it all at once! God, I don't know why I didn't think of ...

Ah, thank you! I'm intending for this to be for young adults with adult appeal. I was also worried about it being too graphic and gory. I'm definitely going to ...

Beautiful. There is so much to like here. I love the idea of a "minute shack filled up with too much person" This poem is publishable and you should try ...

lol no problem

Hi! Thank you for reading. I did do a lot of line by line edits before I published it here. I wanted it to be at the best standard it ...

Hi, not a critique, just wanted to say I really enjoyed the elegant prose here. A nice fragment of love and life. Thank you for sharing.

Hey Mea, thanks for coming back! Happy to see you enjoyed this! The attraction is definitely all physical and more on Hana's side, as at this point Julian just sees ...

Hey Blue, thanks for readin! So confession time: this is totally motivated by 50 Shades. I didn't even particularly like that book lol, but one day I just thought to ...

Hey Mea, thanks for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed it. The cliche and info-dumpy opening definitely needs work. I was totally thinking the same thing about the coffee run-in as ...

Thank you for the review, Erika! Very helpful!

Thank you for the swift review, Olive! Some really great nits here that will really make a difference in the tone of voice. Great advice, as always. Thank you!

Hey Olive! Thanks for the review! You made some really great suggestions here. I took your advice about making Kit's reaction to his parents death more dramatic and believable, and ...

Hey Carlito, as always, your review is detailed, constructive, helpful, and specific. I have to say I understand that the story didn't really "grab" you, especially with the first six ...

Hi Olive, thanks so much for reading this! Your comments are really sound and constructive. Yes, the pacing of the first six paragraphs is pretty slow and info-dumpy. I was ...

Thanks so much for reading this! I was hoping to get at least one more review eventually! I've revised this a lot since carboncore gave his critique, so the things ...