Dreami

In the 4th verse, the last line, "And watch someone’s life drain away", I think would sound better if you had "And watch a life drain away", cause it seems ...

lol, it is kinda different, its a start. I drift away through honey There is music in my ears This sounds pretty, but its one of those lines that is ...

very nice, but I think if you wanted, you could combine some of the lines.Here's kinda an example.Before it was kinda too spread out, and you have too many ands, ...

great! I really enjoyed it, the only thing I would check over is spelling. I saw one or two small grammar errors like this: civilisation-spelt civilization :wink: And also, I ...

I really think the "Things I think about in the shower" could be taken out. When I see it, I was like "huh?What is that there for?" Then the "When ...

Wow! Very nice, exspecially if this is one of your first few times writing non-ryming!The only area that needs work it this: I am A drop of water Smooth, slick, ...

Your poem is amazing! Its one of those where, if you really care what they are saying, it goes right to the heart, but if you don't its just like ...