DragonGirl11

Hey IseeEdward! I'm going to attempt to review this a little more in depth than the others here, chapter by chapter. I've read and watched the whole Twilight series, so ...

Hey there, it's me again! The first part was definitely better. It was stronger grammatically, flowed better, and had a better storyline. If you could bring this part up to ...

Happy Review Day! This story was really good, except for several mix-ups in tenses the others have pointed out already. I saw a few of those in the beginning few ...

Hello, HaydenSmith! This poem is very well written, and it captured the situation facing the church, and in fact the whole world, absolutely beautifully. I loved the bit, Once as ...

DragonGirl11 here, hoping to help you become a better writer. This story is a really good idea. The princess betrayed by her love: classic. The first few paragraphs really grabbed ...

What I really noticed about this poem was the way the lines were so short. There are several places where you might want to consider rearranging line breaks, for example, ...

Hello, I'm DragonGirl11, and I'll be reviewing Trickster's Almonds today. I know it's older, but no reviews? Really? Starting from the beginning: the description of drowning was a little unconventiona

"Death's Sorrow" is a great read! The various ways for people to die, and Death's reactions to them , were really good. I especially loved how this was told from ...

:smt044 Oh my goodness, that is epic! I am definitely trying this. Seriously, nice work. The satirical how-to kind of attitude was awesome. It's a sweet idea! Add those spot-on ...

Good job! Your poem was beautiful. You certainly got the theme across well. Just a couple of notes: t hat person that creates happiness from nothingness? t hat person that ...

Great job! I'm not sure what to point out other than what others already have, but I'll put in my two cents worth anyway. The lunchroom bit could have been ...

Wow, Confetti, that really blew me away! It's such a powerful story for so few words. I can't think of anything bad to say about it. I love the way ...