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  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Such Tracks-Chapter 4

    You should make more. However there was A LOT of mistake in here: The font you were using shouldn't be in the entire chapter, If it's in the past just ...

    Sep 20, 2015
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: His Name Is Andrew.

    That's a really good story! Yea, you should make more. There were some mistakes in here, though. I will tell you all of them: "front of me and I tripped, ...

    Sep 20, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Spiritual, Mystery / Suspense Re: Why Do We Suffer?

    Well, this was a lot longer than I expected! Anyways, this is even better than the last few ones that I'm surprised this has no reviews nor comments. Ok, you ...

    Sep 19, 2015
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Girl in the Fishbowl

    This is really sad due to the fact that I knew someone who wouldn't talk that much due to a disease :( . Anyways, this was really great! I was ...

    Sep 19, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: I hate myself

    I hate you too.. Just kidding :D. Anyway, this poem is great! BUT: "Cos you can't find me on any shelf" I think you should write "Cus" or "coz"... or ...

    Sep 19, 2015
  • Poetry » Satire, Satire Re: Cult Suicide

    I'm pretty sure this is a suicide note, right? So, this guy is sad of his life, "How it means nothing" and always wanted to mimic a writer...and write down ...

    Sep 15, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Spiritual Re: The Plan

    The story is going great so far! There ARE a few things that I don't like: I walk up to the house and go around to the back door once ...

    Sep 15, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Spiritual Re: Introduction

    Ok, this is pretty short, but it sure gives out a message. Now, I don't think that many people worship these creatures. HOWEVER, you should keep fighting, The Christan population ...

    Sep 14, 2015
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Culture Gone Wrong

    Yay, time for a review with a poem like this. Yay. Ok, first of all, try to block bad words or rate it 18 plus. Also, this poem seems great, ...

    Sep 14, 2015
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Sanguinem

    This is REALLY good, but there somethings that I can tell you. First of all, "The Assassins" is too cliche. I suggest "Three Guilty" or maybe "The assassins and the ...

    Sep 14, 2015


When your heart gets pierced with arrows, don't rip them out and pierce those around you in retribution for your hurt. You'll only unnecessarily wound others and bleed to death yourself.
— LadyMysterio