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Re: All's My Fault
Great! I enjoyed it (: I felt like I was getting to know you as a writer and not just seeing the piece as just another poem. You've got a ...
Apr 16, 2011 -
Re: Leaves
Poetry is all about perspective, and this is a unique take I haven't ever seen! I loved when you described them coming and going (I.e. Glossy + fiery tint). The ...
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: The Painted Martyr - Excerpt
Nice hook - entire piece had a lot of drama. I'm sure that you were aiming to inflict emotion, so good job in that sense! Don't get too caught up ...
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: Morgan's Lullaby
At times it flowed nicely, but most of it felt like you were trying to cram/force lines together just to make the rhyme. However, the last stanza doesn't match the ...
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: Daddy's Little Girl
This made me go awww and miss being a little girl. This piece clearly conveys the fears and confusion of growing older and independent, sometimes apart, from parents. I would ...
Mar 7, 2011 -
Re: Son of the moon
I like this, your (or the speaker's) emotion regarding the issue is very evident. The imagery of the first stanza is great! I wish you continued more of the captivating ...
Mar 7, 2011
