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  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: All's My Fault

    Great! I enjoyed it (: I felt like I was getting to know you as a writer and not just seeing the piece as just another poem. You've got a ...

    Apr 16, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Leaves

    Poetry is all about perspective, and this is a unique take I haven't ever seen! I loved when you described them coming and going (I.e. Glossy + fiery tint). The ...

    Mar 8, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Painted Martyr - Excerpt

    Nice hook - entire piece had a lot of drama. I'm sure that you were aiming to inflict emotion, so good job in that sense! Don't get too caught up ...

    Mar 8, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Morgan's Lullaby

    At times it flowed nicely, but most of it felt like you were trying to cram/force lines together just to make the rhyme. However, the last stanza doesn't match the ...

    Mar 8, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Daddy's Little Girl

    This made me go awww and miss being a little girl. This piece clearly conveys the fears and confusion of growing older and independent, sometimes apart, from parents. I would ...

    Mar 7, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Son of the moon

    I like this, your (or the speaker's) emotion regarding the issue is very evident. The imagery of the first stanza is great! I wish you continued more of the captivating ...

    Mar 7, 2011


Follow your inner moonlight; don't hide the madness
— Allen Ginsburg