Derek

Bravo sir, an excellent short story. You said in the previous part it was in the same world as your novel? That is a very cool way of fleshing out ...

I really liked this, you gave a good look at the world without going into too much obvious detail, showing the world slowly instead of throwing it all into a ...

Emotional. It was well written, enough for me to feel bad for the kid, which is always a good thing, especially in a short story. Noticed a few grammar mistakes ...

Helen The cupboard was bare, that was the first thing I noticed. Someone had been at this safe house recently and none of the resistance had been to replace the ...

“And I almost cost my closest friend two fingers and someone to share the weight of the whole situation with.” She let out yet another frustrated sigh, and all of ...

Wow that was longer then I was expecting it to be ha. Anyway, you did a really good job on this I must say. The only thing I can really ...

I really liked this piece and will be following it out of interest in the storyline. Your writing is very good, I'm jealous. Your dialog is engaging and detailed as ...

Hello again :D. I found some flaws! Yes! No wait that's not good. I apologies :lol: You are right, you did use Our hero way to much. lol. Other then ...

I do envy your writing skill. Much like the last time I found nothing wrong. Description was very good, writing was amazing like a pro writer to be honest. It ...

I enjoyed reading this! Nice job :D. Unfortunately I don't have the time right now to write a actual review but I'll just give some suggestions! So overall it was ...

As I've said in the past, I love poems that tell us something, give us descriptions of something from a point of view in which we wouldn't usually view it ...

Well it makes me want to read the story. It's a good opener if you are going to make it one. Draws you in, makes you wonder what is going ...

I like this! It was very fun to read. I think the coolest part is how everyone can probably relate to something that you have written up their. I agree ...

Ha, this does sounds like a window cleaner. I always like this stuff. If I didn't know you were writing about a window cleaner I would be so confused, but ...

I agree with the person above. I could imagine hearing this in song form, unlike most other lyrics I read. Taylor Swift matches this perfectly! It would be a song ...