Demoness

Noo, i dont agree with "LastPaladin" Okay, it might have been a bit repeative-- But still, it doesnt have to be complicated to be a good poem, this was short ...

Aoow, this was aweesomly sweet

Ooh, Thanku.. i see my mistakes now, i get a little carried away when i write so i dont have time to think, but i will look it through Haha! ...

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My god, that was a very appreciated comment.. made my... ehm... midnight.. x) Thankuu very much-.- // Sagaa

Thanxx for the recent replies, I love some good criticism... And thanku for the advice... // Sagaa

Thankuu all, for the replies. I know i'm obbsessed with the rhymes. x)) But yeaah. i'll change the spelling mistakes and make some small changes.. dont think i will erase ...

Tahnkuu.. but now i still feel i forced ppl not to be critical to me.. It's okay to critizize a little, but i do very miuch appriciate the nice comment ...

It was a real good poem, but as someone said, rhymes or no rhymes.. it got a bit confusing But still, i liked the story and it was all through ...

Thankuu all for your replies, and a little extra thankuu to the nice parts x)) I know i mess up all the time, but when you dont speak english originally ...

Okay, so you dont like it, but i got it, you dont have to repeat it over and over.. it doesnt make it better.

Aoow thankuu, really mean it x)

Thanxx for your reply,, i can agree on some but i dont think u really get my point sometimes. For example "my inner hunger feed" it was no emergency rhyme.. ...

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