Demoness

Wooaaah, this was the oddest thing I've read! I can't even say if that's a compliment or not... this was just eh, original - I do like original though so ...

This is inspiring.. And powerful and strong.. yet sad... this is alot actually! It's hopeful too! It truly holds loads of emotions and I really like it. I like your ...

[quote]I turned to see what room I had hide in, the chairs and desks where (It should be were) stacked against the walls. In the centre of the whole room ...

Neeey, this is sooo, sooo sad! Beautiful yet, but sad! I agree on the others, this could make a great short story! At times it actually felt more like a ...

I like the content of the poem! It's bravely described and full of imagery. I am though, always picking on people's structures and I will do so with yours too. ...

Wooaaah, this was... ehm, different - good different though, very original, I like original! The place where the story is set is interesting too, and I like the way you ...

Wow, this original if not Brilliant and Hilarious too! I didn't find much flaws with this, it was an enjoyable read and I'd love to read more of your works! ...

So this was quite depressing... I sort of wanted to weap a little bit myself! But it was a good depress, sad and sweet all at ones! I feel that ...

This was most certainly intriguing! Mysterious, dark and yet it ends quite hopeful! I'd like to know more though - you should keep this story rolling! :D Your grammatic errors ...

This is a beautifully described story and as Froggy said, it has potenital to be a poem just as sweet! I like how you put us all in the mind ...

I don't want to run in and pick this a art with all the grammatic errors and stuff, because there were a few. But I think previous reviewers caught almost ...

Good Luck In The Contest! I like this story, it's descriptive, doesn't leave the reader unsatisfied, you begin looking for something, you find it, you think about it and there's ...

Neeeey! This is waay too sad! My little brother's name is Elliot and gaah, it just made it even sadder since I imagines him sitting there in the backseat of ...

Again, your descriptions are impeccable! This time you do hint that there are intruging stuff to come but it is still little that hasa happened, you just express long, vivid ...

Goosh! You've got some true gifts when it comes to imagery and descriptions. This intro is just so vivid! Nice, nice job! All though, it's not very intruging, I mean ...