Demeter

Hi, Payne! This was quite a light read, which I liked. As a whole, it was nicely steady, without any obstacles to disturb the reading process. But, since there weren't ...

Hi Rules! I, like Lily, really liked the opening of the poem. It painted a clear picture in my head, especially the first two lines - I was so enamoured ...

Hi Moriko! Here I am as I promised, after your wiley ways of tricking me (no, seriously, it was funny). I think what you've got here is a pretty good ...

Hi again, Persephone! It split at her a-line, coming down to her feet in strips of satin and another silky material that I had never seen before. I got the ...

Hi Persephone! I'm Demeter. ;) “Yes. No! Not the scarves, they’re simply ghastly! I think this was a nice way of beginning this story - it pulled me in the ...

Hi there, Mattimias! It's not exactly Christmas Eve anymore, but I hope that's alright! As I've been saying many times during these last couple of days, I'm somewhat of a ...

Hey Wicked! So, since this is for your uni application, I'm going to be extra nitpicky. But I believe that is what you want! “I’d like to call up Tyler ...

Hi, Samii! I liked the narrative concept and the story in this poem. I haven't read something like this in a while, so it was refreshing. I also like rhyming ...

Hi there, RikerRayn! First of all, I would strongly recommend proofreading before you post -- by doing that, you'd notice some of the silly mistakes writers are bound to make ...

Hi, Pony! I liked the rhyme in the first stanza. I'm not sure if it was intentional, but somehow it felt very appropriate in this kind of poem. However, I ...

Hi, Drama! I liked the short scenes. It felt a bit different, and with something like this, you don't really need anything longer, especially if you're going to have every ...

Hi, Livluvroc! Just so you know, I moved this from Short Stories to Science Fiction Novels, as you said you had misplaced it :) Alright, so one thing that might ...

Hi, Cyrus! Wow, I really like rhyming poetry if it's done well, and you did it really well! I'm locked in you- I am aware- trapped inside your captive stare. ...

Hi there, Gloss! What you did rather well was capture the speaker's feelings into this poem. However, I think you were a bit too straight-forward with it and didn't really ...

Hi there, Drawers! I think it's really interesting you have recurring dreams. Dreams are actually wonderful sources for stories and ideas (hey, ask Stephenie Meyer >.>) so I'm glad you ...