Young Writers Society

Nice. This one actually makes me smile, which is what I was going for when I clicked humor. I don't always get that when I click humor so it's a nice change of pace. Now, I'm going to give you the 'normal' review I give other poets so they have something to think about.

Meter: It helps the poem flow
Rhyme: It helps the poem ring

Now that's basically it. But this isn't that kind of poem. For YOU I'd suggest looking for new places to break lines, because the seem rather long to me. But I love short lines, so it's just a 'me' thing. It's a great poem. ^^ Thanks for the lol.

I really loved reading this poem. It is really lighthearted and... your avatar is very distracting and awesome by the way. Anyways, your poem was a very lighthearted and fun read. I love how it is not really written in normal poetic style. It does not rhyme and flow like normal poems do, but it still fits together really well and sounds really nice. It kind of is making fun of just about everyone who rights poems, and I love it. Poems are very serious things and are very confusing at times, it is hilarious how you wrote this poem about writing poems and making fun of those very serious ones. Personally, all I write is poetry, so I find this extremely funny and I think that just about anyone who writes poetry or not would really enjoy reading it.

Well, since I'm reviewing this, I should probably tell you some things that you could do in order to make it better. Well, I don't really have much to say for that. You need to put a space after "Changing autumn into spring?". Also, the fourth and fifth lines of the last stanza are a little bit confusing. They are not bad though and it might just be me having issues with comprehension because I'm tired right now. Anyways, great job and keep up the awesome writing!

By the way, I am definitely reading more of your work from now on.

I really loved reading this poem. It is really lighthearted and... your avatar is very distracting and awesome by the way. Anyways, your poem was a very lighthearted and fun read. I love how it is not really written in normal poetic style. It does not rhyme and flow like normal poems do, but it still fits together really well and sounds really nice. It kind of is making fun of just about everyone who rights poems, and I love it. Poems are very serious things and are very confusing at times, it is hilarious how you wrote this poem about writing poems and making fun of those very serious ones. Personally, all I write is poetry, so I find this extremely funny and I think that just about anyone who writes poetry or not would really enjoy reading it.

Well, since I'm reviewing this, I should probably tell you some things that you could do in order to make it better. Well, I don't really have much to say for that. You need to put a space after "Changing autumn into spring?". Also, the fourth and fifth lines of the last stanza are a little bit confusing. They are not bad though and it might just be me having issues with comprehension because I'm tired right now. Anyways, great job and keep up the awesome writing!

By the way, I am definitely reading more of your work from now on.

Hi Moriko!

Here I am as I promised, after your wiley ways of tricking me (no, seriously, it was funny).

I think what you've got here is a pretty good basis/starting point/frame, call it what you will! I like these sort of "light" poems, they're very amusing.

One thing I could suggest to you to make this an even more enjoyable read is tweaking the poem so that the lines would be somewhat the same length. You don't have to do it religiously or anything, but I find it much easier to concentrate on a poem when there's more consistency. It's most easily noticed by the mentioned similar line lengths, but of course there are other ways to do it as well.

I also felt like this is the sort of poem that would do well with rhymes! So maybe, if you feel like it, you could try adding some rhymes. I think that would do wonders for the whole humourous setting that this has.

Also, just a little nitpick:

A poem that will turn atumn into spring.

Ha, it's hilarious! Kind of like making fun of all those peoples who write dreary, serious poems and everything. (Like me, but I don't mind)

Does it sucks?

lol, that's hilarious...