Delaine

Hello there, Good job on this piece. The story was believable, your narrator could be related to, and your writing is smooth. The only thing that cries out for improvement ...

Hello there, The internet's favorite monster (or at least, one of them): Slenderman. It's brave of you to attempt this, and for that I offer you praise. Now, to the ...

Hello there, This certainly is a poem, one I found to be a very pleasant read. It lacks punctuation and capitalization, two things that are critical to writing any piece ...

I mean not to be harsh, but watch for grammatical errors before you hit 'submit'. These mistakes distract readers from the story and lessen its potential. You build up the ...

Hello there, What I noticed first was your use of adverbs and adverbial phrases. "He hissed angrily" - You needn't specify that he's angry; that much is already obvious. "She ...

Goooooood evening, Like GriffenClaw before me, I'm a tad confused as to the nature of this once-winged creature. I assume it's an angel who gave up his place in the ...

In the shadow of caeai's review, I shall offer my humble suggestions. I like the fact that this is a short poem. Love need not be espoused like some convoluted ...