DeepCrystal

Thanks and I will work on that. I have been told that I ought to cull a few characters, but it does seem to throw people off when a story ...

I were to pick up a Jodi Picoult book which one would you recommend?

Thank you very much. I will definitely work on the characters. Also, Pauline and Kieran are not brother and sister.

I didn't give up on this novel. I just stopped uploading and I've recently began revising.

Thanks. I am still tinkering with this PoV and Kieran's pov as both offer good plot lines for the story. I am basically writing both PoVs simultaneously. As a result ...

No problem! Yeah I know what you mean about the whole copy and paste hassle. Sometimes your italics will disappear as well. And I am not offended, I'm just a ...

If it looks like I am not having fun with this, I apologize. I am having fun. What's the point of writing if you can't have fun with it, right? ...

Thank you very much for your thoughts on this chapter and the other one. I see what you're saying about the change in description. Maybe I got a little lazy ...

You far from the first person to think that my MC is a girl. He's a guy. And I will tweak it, but what I meant to say by "dabbled" ...

Also I wasn't able to put space in between each stanza.

It's about chronic pains.

It is about chronic pains. The speaker is a CP sufferer. The foul embrace are the pains.

I see what you're saying. I could split it right where he realizes it is rape and make the second half a chapter on it's own.

I know his speech seems awkward. It's intentional. Read on and you might understand why.

Never play spoons with plastic spoons. They'll break.