Deanie

An idea for switching point of view could simply be to label each chapter with a name, and then that is the point of view it is in? Or you ...

Thank you SO much for the detailed review. So many things that need tweaking :D

Don't forget the end [] closing brackets before and after the words quote.

[ quote ] then whatever you want to say [/ quote ] But without the spaces ;)

then whatever you want to say

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Thanks for the review! And the pregnancy should be explained later on ;)

I wasn't notified of this review, so I am sorry for replying late. I should watch those edits, and thanks for all the feedback

Thanks for the review!

Thanks for the review! And you pretty much pegged what a stream of consciousness is ;) As for technical issues, most were purposeful except for that last one pointed out ...

Thanks so much for all your comments! They're so helpful. I have yet to hand it in, and I am working on the tune at the moment. I might edit ...

Thanks so much for both of your reviews today! This was helpful, and I was worried I was being too repetitious in some areas.

Aww thanks so much for the review! I will work on all advice given.

Okay, I need to spend more time putting background info in! I will be sure to work on that :)

Thanks for the review