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I loved your story! It was very detailed and had very few spelling mistakes. I like the start and the ending. Maybe work on describing things better. Like the Chinese ...

I like the main idea of the story, a kid trying to find an answer. I wonder if you could shorten your sentences and sometimes when someone is speaking you ...

I liked the beginning and the ending. I wonder if you could shorten your sentences. Also in some parts there wasn't enough detail so I couldn't really understand it.