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Hey, Very intriguing story and for me I could tell within the first paragraph or two it was going to be beautifully written. Although I do not visit on here ...

Hey! First welcome to YWS. I recently joined this month and already I love this sight. I'm glad you've been inspired by the many writers here and I am glad ...

My opinions were very mixed. First a few short notes: 1. I would make the large spaces in between PoV changes smaller. 2. I don't think the name is necessary ...

OK, so my overall thought was that it was amazing. It bothers me so much, but some authors do not have a story inside their poetry that flows properly and ...

I thought it was very good. The big thing for me was that I had a perfect story throughout every stanza. The only thing I thought was a bit iffy ...

Yay, I got quite lucky clicking the new posts button right when you posted this. As you said I did feel as if this chapter bridged the gap. I was ...

Hey again, So here is the deal, I figure that I since I will be reading every chapter after this from on I will just tell you one positive point ...

I really don't have much to say other than awesome. The thing I felt that you did best was the descriptions. They were so abundant and flowed well. I really ...

hey, I will try to express my thoughts to the best of my ability. First I would like to touch on the subject of rushing to fast through the novel. ...

Hi, I think I am going to make this quite short. The thing I liked most was the length. Boy did you put a lot of work into this! I ...

Hey, First, I would like to say that the prologue was very good. I like the whole concept of their being a world war III. This factor alone adds a ...

I am here, (sorry for delay) As a whole I thought it was very good. The paragraphs were pretty well structured. Obviously the main thing throughout is the humor. It ...

Just a quick comment. Sorry it took so long! Overall I really liked the way this chapter was presented. The description of rushing to school was adequate as well as ...

Hi, Firstly, I have seen you all over the place lately young. Well, I really liked the flow of the story. It felt smooth. My favorite thing that you expressed ...

I am with Ruby on this one, but I would like to offer some praise. Throughout the entire poem I felt the flow of the stanzas was very good. My ...