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Re: Experiment 381 Chapter 1
So, this is gonna be short, apologies up front. I have a headache, so forgive me. 🦇This story does need paragraphs. It’s hard to read it without them 🦇It’s a ...
Mar 29, 2020 -
Re: Heroes of Valtome, Chapter 1
Oooh, a gang of misfits. I love gangs of misfits *squee!* Okay, let’s put on my grumpy glasses first and tear this beautiful thing you created apart like the villain ...
Mar 29, 2020 -
Re: The Meeting
Nice to see another Star Wars fan! Okay, here’s the review: Bad cop: The first paragraph feels a bit clumsy. To fix it I’d maybe turn it into two or ...
Mar 29, 2020 -
Re: The endless sky of darkness
Oh wow, this was good! But first, the bad….. Bad cop: - You should probably explain where and when the first scene is - Maybe say the names right away ...
Nov 8, 2018
