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Re: An Alien Named Bob- Chapter 4 (35513), Chapter 5 (Pielar) and Chapter 6 (Teergan)
Hi Just so everyone knows Ive worked on and rewritten the first 10 chapters, Im trying to do the whole book, some issues are addressed, some Ill be honest Im ...
Jun 1, 2020 -
Re: An Alien Named Bob- Introduction (Darryl)
I get the whole paragraph thing but to me it is more about quick fire thoughts as he is terrified, other characters think in huge chunks at a time. Some ...
May 24, 2020 -
Re: An Alien Named Bob- Introduction (Darryl)
The next chapters are in my blog and on this. I think I need to make it clearer its an virus but too be honest the vagueness adds to the ...
May 24, 2020 -
Re: An Alien Named Bob- Chapter 1 (Manoj), Chapter 2 (Bob) and Chapter 3 (Codfold)
Thank you so much, I've never been as good as catching the spelling and grammar errors in my work. I had cut out a lot of expressionism, just because it ...
May 12, 2020 -
Re: VALOR - Prologue - Hear How They Whistle
I'm hoping that means you have a Hard magic system, I'm writing up a Hard Magic system for a Book Im writing except it's not really magic, its technology they ...
Apr 29, 2020 -
Re: Chapter- 1 One spring night
I liked the mystery. I would say you focus a lot on details that maybe don't need to be focused on. Saying 'Medium Height of 5'5' was just repeating the ...
Apr 28, 2020 -
Re: the purple man(re-edited)
Wow, Deep Ideas for sure, I'm interested, hooked, remembering my darkest dreams, what do they say about me? Definitely thought provoking! I liked it
Apr 28, 2020 -
Re: the purple man(re-edited)
Wow, Deep Ideas for sure, I'm interested, hooked, remembering my darkest dreams, what do they say about me? Definitely thought provoking! I liked it
Apr 28, 2020